This is a great fantasy that packs a big punch; I hope that more people see it. But there’s a sad aspect to it: we all know that this will never, ever happen. The fact that it will never, ever happen really drives home how unfair the situation is. Worse, a properly balanced scenario would have the boyfriend and the girlfriend going in together, he to get a vasectomy and she to get her tubes tied.
One thing about it bothers me, though: there’s an undercurrent of viciousness to it, a whiff of vengeance. I can imagine misogynists seizing upon this as an example of the feminist desire to emasculate all men. This story needs something to deodorize the smell of viciousness. For the life of me, I can’t see how to do that. Any ideas?